I wait

[wolfish lover]

I wait

Unable to howl
To cry to the sky,
Unable to run
To begin to fly

Unable to love
To forge a passionate tryst
Unable to live
To unequivocally exist

Is it time?
Time to howl and to run
Time to love and live
Is it time?

[wolfish lover]

The Beast

The beast inside me
Clawing its way forth

Inevitable defeat
Lies in my way

How do I stop something,
That is part of me

I force the beast away
To fight again, another day

But inside, I know.
The wolf will not be denied

[wolfish lover]

She waits,

I see her,
She does not see me
She is waiting
What is she waiting for
Is she waiting for someone
Is she waiting for me
inside her, I think I see
A wolf,
Struggling to be free
But for now, I wait
Watching the girl who waits
Who waits for the wolf,
Who struggles to be free

(my favorite so far)

[wolfish lover]

please post, i would like to know what you think of my poems, I have not had a lot of experiance and would appreciate constructive criticism

[wolfish lover]

The outskirts of nowhere

The trees are dead and dieing
Crows circle the plains
Forlorn in their lonesome flying
In the outskirts of nowhere

Following the endless track
A lone wolf runs
Forgotten by its pack
In the outskirts of nowhere

Towards the bruised horizon
The lone wolf runs
A steady rhythm
In the outskirts of nowhere

It looks into the sky
The red, red sky
It howls, why?,
In the outskirts of nowhere

Not even an echo
A cry in return,
The wolf continues to run
In the outskirts of nowhere.



Alone

I am forsaken
Exiled
Banished

I am fighting below and above
Unable to be with the one I love
Impossible to talk, by letter or dove

I am forgotten
Gone
Elapsed

Worlds apart, we are set
Unable to penetrate times, thick net
Whether by rhyme or threat

I am alone
Alone…
Alone…



Gone

All I see, all I hear
All the joy, all the Fear

All that life has caught
All for everything
All for naught

All come to the same end
All follow the usual trend
All that is, except one
Who against death, has won

Her name is gone
But to her, I am drawn
Irresistibly on
Like a moth to a flame
Like a hunter, to its game

Unable to turn away
Caught as if I am too, prey.
Has my mind begun to fray?
I am forced to look past
Back at my own worlds cast
Though the distance looks so vast

I begin the long journey back
Unable to follow her track
Feeling my mind, begin to crack
The crack, so small at first
I know will begin to thirst

Drinking my sanity
Without a single sting
Stealing my humanity

All I see all I hear
All the joy all the fear

Gone…

[Sedrina]

The outskirts of nowhere

The trees are dead and dieing
Crows circle the plains
Forlorn in their lonesome flying
In the outskirts of nowhere

Following the endless track
A lone wolf runs
Forgotten by its pack
In the outskirts of nowhere

Towards the bruised horizon
The lone wolf runs
A steady rhythm
In the outskirts of nowhere

It looks into the sky
The red, red sky
It howls, why?,
In the outskirts of nowhere

Not even an echo
A cry in return,
The wolf continues to run
In the outskirts of nowhere.


i think in this one your rhyming (i cant spell) pattern was messed up a little with the words horizon and rhythm. overall though i like the imagry and the flow.

i also think maybe you can extend your vocabulary so you dont use the same word over and over again. a lot of people have that problem. when i write poetry i use this (http://www.rhymezone.com) site to eliminate that problem and it has been very good for me. it isnt just rhymes. check it out.

[wolfish lover]

in that poem i tried to use a little parallelism, "in the outskirts of nowhere" repeated each stanza, but as i read it again, it does give me a feeling of redundancy or repetition. thanks for the input :) and thanks for the compliments

[Sedrina]

no problem keep it up man you're good

[sagitariusspartan]

you are amazing!

[wolfish lover]

Wow! thanks alot :). really really appreciate the compliments and help. Im working on some new poems that will hopefully be on soon. Ill just add them to some of the first posts so you dont have to dig for em.

[wolfish lover]

sorry for double post, but two new poems are up Alone and Gone in the same post as the Wastelands of nowhere

[SilverMoon]

it is good