New poem

[wolfish lover]

It has been several weeks since i posted my last poem, and i thought that it would probably not due to bring that thread back, so here i am posting a new one,

i would really appreciate any input, advice or just plain thoughts about my work, i know i could use the help, please post.



I am frozen by the glacial blue
A clear color untainted by hue
I gaze into his fathomless eyes
I see a struggle behind the guise

And as I am staring
I see crimson, flaring
Oh so deep at first
Hidden by the blues strong thirst

But as I am staring
The crimson begins glaring
Melting the blue ice
Not once, but twice

Both eyes are red
The blue, entirely fled
And yet I still gaze
Lost, in crimson maze

And still I am staring
Transfixed by the crimson glaring
And then I see, one sliver of blue
Watching as one becomes two

Slowly the blue is growing
The crimson still unknowing
The blue is now fighting
A battle worthy of writing

Slowly freezing the hellish fire
Gaining ground through sheer desire
Soon the eyes are once again blue
Untainted by any hue

I turn away from the mirror
Knowing that I am no nearer
To being whole inside
Then a groom, with no bride

I do not need to turn
To investigate the burn
In my eye, there is a glare
A crimson, crimson flare

[wolfenknight]

great poem you have there.

[wolfish lover]

Thanks :)

[wolfenknight]

You're welcome

[angelamylover]

Excellent poem! You have great talent! May I ask what it was supposed to be about?

[wolfish lover]

everyone interprets poems differently, but when i read this poem, i see a man, struggling with himself, the blue being good, and the red evil, and no matter how hard he trys to banish his "evil" it is always there. waiting to take control, and thanks for the compliments :)
and if you have any questions or requests, i would be happy to oblige, either post here or pm me

[wolfish lover]

heres a new one, as usual i would love to have your input and advice



Death

The rain is falling
Heavy and hard
Lady death is calling
With a lovers regard

My ship is sinking
So slow, oh so slow
My mind is caught thinking
What do I have to show?

I turn away from death
Oh so beautiful she,
With her icy cold breath
She dooms me with iron decree

I sink below the waves
Slowly giving up hope
Joining the seas cold graves
No longer grasping for rope

I turn and look into her eyes
Ignoring the tempest above
Utterly taken by the guise
My heart is bound in love

I am lost, spellbound
I hear a forsaken sigh
A crooning sound
My own death is nigh

I fall into the cold embrace
She pulls me from the world
Leaving not a single trace
My conscience is unfurled